Natyr Lucio

Incredibly...thank you.

Thank you both for the tip, I changed it accordingly. But Jigsaw, if you're really that reluctant, you are not required to critique it.

The moonlight was all but playing the wind like a flute. It was a beautiful tune. That evening breeze was sweeping through the garden like a great ship with its ...

“We’re coming upon something here,” the man said, wiping the hard-earned sweat from his brow with the back of his dirty hand. It smeared a mess of white dust all ...

This poem was wonderful. You used the element of drama without error and without end. They way you carried it throughout the poem was done very well. Also, the grackling ...

So I think you captured the angsty and overdramatic thing. It's not unbearingly overdramatic, so that's good. The one thing that acts against you (and it acts against you in ...

I liked the idea of emotion as an enemy in this, the conscience of the character causing the problems. It took a couple of times of reader to get all ...

Hm.... Well, I wasn't incredibly fond of this as a poem. It was a good question to ponder, to expand the horizon of thoughts. However, though it makes us think, ...

There was built a city, A miniature place Where snow always fell; All within a glass orb. From outside a window, A boy desired that city, And when the keeper ...

This was amazing. I enjoyed this very much, and here's the reasons that I can actually give. The fragmented flow was perfect. The images and language use were powerful. You ...

Santa....

I wrote this for a friend. Acasia Sink the mountains, sweep the sky Dragons of the trumpet fly They descend with violet throne And all around their flames are shone ...

The repetition of line structure in some parts, and even the limit thereof, was lovely. You used that very well. You provided great imagery and contrasting of themes, between what ...

I really enjoyed this. It seemed like you had a fragmented flow, but I realized that it wasn't fragmented, but meant to be followed. You guided the reader through, not ...

The frogs represent the character's bitterness. She's only an outcast from society, and the people look down on this. Her window's broken because people are throwing rocks through it, and ...